I look into your sweet, soft, gentle eyes,
And all the feelings overwhelm me.
I try to find a suitable disguise
For all my sighs that come sincerely.
When you are close to me, and we are near,
I try my best to disregard your presence.
It's the emotions that I fear.
The ones that don't make any sense.
I wish to never again see thee,
So I would not be tempted to,
Tell you the thoughts that roam inside me.
I wonder what would happen if you knew?
Maybe I shouldn't fight what's true,
Soon, you will know the way I feel toward you.
4 comments:
I like this sonnet better than the last sonnet. but i think that the 8th line is akward. Maybe you could try to refrase it. other than that, i think it's really good.
hi!
big improvement from your last sonnet! it's sweet and truly a love denial. i especially enjoyed the ending because during the whole sonnet you were scared to tell this person how you felt about him, but in the end you decide to tell him. my only concerns are with the 4th line and 8th line. i don't quite understand what you were saying in the 4th line when you say "some sincerely." did you mean "sum"? ...well, that doesn't make sense either. your 8th line doesn't have the same rythem (is that how you spell that) or flow with the rest of your stanza . anways, great job!
Yulia! This is beautiful! Your word choice, and confused emotions from getting sad to happy are truly amazing. You're a great writer!
-katherine
the emotions you put into this sonnet brought it to another level. good job. the transition from sad to happy was also a nice touch. good job
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